Saturday, April 30, 2005

I Walked Another Mile



I hold back a tear and fake a smile
But you see my pain right through it all
You said that you love me so deep, yet
Why do I hesitate to take the fall.

No one knows me like you do
Wouldnt let me cry even for a while
I fear to tread this path unknown, but
Everytime we talk I walk another mile.

Deepthi

10 comments:

Anonymous said...

U r in love dear :) ... and one small comment on the poem, if u want to get into the pro-league, i suggest u avoid using rhymes, they sound amateurish.

Unknown said...

Thank you for the suggestion. I am an amateur in this, just started writing.

Anonymous said...

Good start.Dont worry you will only improve as you write.Do you write them from personal experience?

Unknown said...

Its just few lines that run in my head. I havent started to compose poems that reflect on my life.

Chethan C said...

Write something more out of your personal experience....i am sure u will enjoy writing it more...and u can progress to the next level soon..

Anonymous said...

hey thanks for checking out my blog, listen it doesn't matter whether u sound ameturish or expert its about ur personal satisfaction right. my poetry are all my honest feelings poured out

Anonymous said...

I thought this one was for me :( and you announce its not from your own life! just kidding, keep it up.
I never thought you can write such serious stuff too!!

Anonymous said...

hello!!

Unknown said...

Thank you Sanjuktha and Kountay for your comments.

@Kiran: Ahem!We'll take this discussion elsewhere :)

Unknown said...

Hi Calvin, Great pleasure that you checked my blog :)